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The V.C.s: Lost in Translation
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8th
May 04 |
This is the
"Directors Cut" of a one page strip that appeared on the official
site. Work is underway to illustrate this.
by Richmond Clements
Page 1
Classic 9 frame grid
Frame 1: Exterior shot of VC ship floating in space.
LIN-FU:
Sir, we’ve intercepted a transmission!
Frame 2: A group
of armoured VC’s are moving across the surface of a rugged planet, in the
lead is Smith. They’ve stopped under cover of a large rock while he answers
the call.
SMITH: Patch
it through.
Frame 3: Lin-Fu
at her control panel on board the ship. I don’t know about you, but I’m
trying not imagine her like Uhura with the thing in her ear…
LIN-FU:
Sending now…
FROM RADIO:
Gee! Gg’nakyeeg kngneet
Frame 4: A Geek
patrol. One is holding a communicator to its head; another has a pair of binoculars,
the rest carry guns.
FROM GEEK RADIO:
Gg’ggthek ng’thyeek y’t’gket
Frame 5: POV shot,
from Geek binoculars. We can see the other side of the rock Smith is hiding behind.
His helmet it partly visible around the side of the rock.
CAPTION:
‘Gtannet’th ggt’eekh yyy’kketah!’
Frame 6: We’re
back with Smith and his group behind the rock. If it’s possible to look
nervous in one of those suits, then these guys do.
LIN-FU (OVER
RADIO): Transmission terminated, sir.
SMITH: What
did it say, Lin-Fu?
Frame 7: With
the Geek patrol again. They are moving closer and closer to the VCs’ hiding
place.
Frame 8: Interior
of VC ship, back with Lin-Fu. Knowing what the punch line is, it’s understandable
that she is looking sheepish about what she’s saying.
LIN-FU:
I don’t know sir, it’s all-
SMITH (OVER
RADIO): Don’t say it VC!
Frame 9: Here
was have a shot of Smith, from ground level, looking up and past his shoulder.
He’s facing forward, and totally oblivious to the Geek soldier creeping
over the top of the rock above him, a big Geek knife in it’s filthy alien
hand.
LIN-FU(ON RADIO):
all Geek to me sir.
Page 2:
4 Frames
Frame 1: The geek with the blade leaps from the rock, and onto
Smiths’ back.
GEEK: G’AHHIIII!
SMITH: DAMMIT!
Frame 2: As the
rest of the geeks swarm over and around the rock, attacking the rest of the VCs,
Smith has ignited his backpack, and is shooting into the air, with the geek hanging
onto his back.
Frame 3: Ryx,
Kali and Keege, the rest of the group, are shooting all round them, standing back
to back, they seem to be keeping the geeks at bay.
RYX: Crap!
Were did Smith go?
KALI: Suck
it in! We’ve got more pressing matters right now!
Frame 4: Close
up on one of the VCs. Lets be honest, with the helmet on, it doesn’t matter
which. Lets say Kali for the sake of argument.
KALI: What’s
that noise?
SOUND EFFECT:
Rrrummmmble
Frame 4: From
ground level: A Geek ship has pulled up over the heads of the three VCs.
KEEGE: Oh
G’hit.
RYX: You
said it buddy...
Page 3:
8 Frames
Frame 1: We’re
back with Smith, as he flies desperately through the air, with the Geek still
hanging on. Perhaps it is still trying to stab at him, and he’s holding
its’ knife arm by the wrist.
SMITH: I’ve
had enough of this!
Frame 2: Smith
has flipped over, so that he is head down, and slammed the Geek into a large rock.
Frame 3: Both
Smith and the Geek have staggered to their feet, the Geek is holding it’s
blade out in front of it.
SMITH: Okay
boy, show me what you got.
Frame 4: The Geek
has lunged forward with the blade, but Smith has turned at the waist, so its arm
has gone past him.
Frame 5: (This
is where my years of Kung-Fu finally pay off!) Smith has grabbed the Geek's arm.
He has one hand, palm up, below its’ arm, behind the elbow, the other is
above the forearm.
Frame 6: If you
imagine him pushing up with the hand below, and jerking down with the hand above,
then you’ll see that he’s snapped it’s elbow.
Frame 7: Smith
has bent the Geek’s broken arm right round the wrong way, and has run it
through the gut with the blade it is still clutching.
Frame 8: Smith
standing over the dead body of the Geek. Hero shot.
SMITH: Frickin’
Geek.
Page 4:
7 Frames.
Frame 1: Back with the main group again, pretty much in the
same position we had left them before, surrounded and with the ship above them.
The VCs have their hands in the air.
KALI: Any
ideas?
RYX: I dunno,
I was thinking about crapping myself.
Frame 2: A big
explosion erupts in the middle of the group of Geeks that are surrounding the
VCs.
Frame 3: Inside
the Geek ship, they are pointing at a screen, which shows Smith firing at them
with a bazooka.
Frame 4: The Geek ship fires its engines, and sets off towards
Smith, as another shell lands among the Geeks. Seeing their chance, the VCs start
to fight back. Punching, kicking or firing at the remaining Geeks with retrieved
weapons.
RYX: HIT
‘EM, VCs!
Frame 4: The Geek
ship is rushing towards Smith. He stands, in the foreground, with his back to
us, bazooka on his shoulder.
Frame 6: Side on (ish, whatever you want) of Smith firing the
weapon.
SMITH:
Smile, you son of a –
SOUND EFFECT: CHUNNT!!
Frame 7: The shell
explodes spectacularly on the front of the Geek ship.
Page 5:
Okay, four frames on this page, each going lengthways across the page, like a
widescreen picture.
Frame 1-3: Starting in the first frame, we are pretty far out,
we see the Geek ship impact with the ground, and Smith is just a small figure
on the opposite side of the frame. Frame 2 and we have pulled in a bit, as the
ship ploughs across the ground, closer to Smith, who hasn’t moved. In frame
3, the ship has eventually ground to a halt, inches from Smith’s feet. He
still hasn’t moved.
Frame 4: From behind Smith. The Geek ship fills the background.
Smith is standing with his back to us. Legs apart and his bazooka pointing upwards,
you know, another hero shot.
SMITH: This
place is clean VCs, let’s move out.
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