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Dredd: The Line - Part 2
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3rd
August 04 |
Regular 2000AD
Review contributor Richmond Clements concludes his Dredd tale...
Part 2
By Richmond Clements
PAGE 1
Three frames.
Frame one takes up the entire page with its grand vista, with the other two frames
being set on top of it.
Frame 1: Judge
Keys is sitting astride his Lawmaster, in a watching bay, taking in the magnificent
view of the city around him.
RADIO JAG:
REPORT OF ALTERCATION AT THE MONKEY BAR. ANY UNITS IN THE AREA?
Frame 2: Head shot of Keys, with radio mike held to his face.
KEYS: KEYS
HERE. I’M FIVE MINUTES AWAY, I’LL TAKE IT.
RADIO JAG:
ALL YOURS KEYS. CONTROL OUT.
Frame 3: Keys roaring off into traffic. A couple of cars have to swerve out of
his way.
SFX LAWMASTER
SIREN: WEEEOOOEEEEOOOO!
SFX CARS:
SCREEEEE!!
PAGE 2
Seven frames
Frame 1: Exterior of Grand
Hall of Justice.
CAPTION:
GRAND HALL OF JUSTICE.
Frame 2: Interior of Dredd’s office. You can imagine how Spartan it is,
no clutter or desktop toys. Just books of law and a computer terminal on the desk
and a picture of Vienna. Dredd is seated behind the desk, working at the computer.
DREDD: COMPUTER,
SHOW ME THE FILE FOR JUDGE KEYS.
Frame 3: Over Dredd’s shoulder, we’re looking at the screen with him.
We can see Keys’ picture on the screen, and there is a load of text, too
much for us to make out. But that’s alright, because Dredd will read it
for us.
DREDD: PARENTS
DIED IN AN ACCIDENT WHEN HE WAS A CHILD. GIVEN INTO CARE OF JUSTICE DEPARTMENT.
OLDER BROTHER FOSTERED.
Frame 4: Dredd is leaning back in his chair, looking thoughtful.
DREDD: BROTHER...
COMPUTER, SHOW ME THE BROTHER’S FILE.
Frame 5: Close up on the screen. On it is a series of mug shots; it’s our
friend Dice.
DREDD: DROKK!
IT’S THE PERP FROM THE WAREHOUSE!
Frame 6: Dredd is on his
feet, heading quickly to the door.
DREDD: CONTROL,
GIVE ME THE LOCATION OF JUDGE KEYS
CONTOL JAG:
CURRENTLY INVESTIGATING A DISTURBANCE AT THE MONKEY BAR.
Frame 7: Exterior of Grand Hall of Justice, with Dredd roaring towards us in the
foreground upon his Lawmaster.
DREDD: I’M
ON MY WAY!
PAGE 3
Eight frames.
Frame 1: Exterior of the
Monkey Bar. Keys has his gun in his hand, and is kicking open the door of the
bar.
Frame 2: Interior of bar. The door has burst open. Keys is in the doorway, with
his gun raised in a two handed grip, covering the room. We are looking at Keys,
we can’t see the room.
KEYS: NOBODY
MOVE!
Frame 3: Keys POV. We take in the view of the bar room. There has obviously been
a fight. Tables and chairs are overturned; there is broken glass on the floor.
There are only a few patrons in the bar, a couple are leaning against the bar,
holding at bleeding wounds. On the floor in the middle of the room, there is a
man lying, a pretty young woman is cradling him in her arms.
Frame 4: Keys is crouching down in front of the man and woman. He is touching
the man lightly on the throat, checking for a pulse. We can see now that the man
has a serious head wound, the woman is crying, tears rolling down her cheeks.
She is obviously too upset to answer Keys’ questions.
KEYS: WHAT
HAPPENED HERE?
KEYS CONT.:
WHAT HAPPENED!?
Frame 5: Full length shot of one of the men at the bar, he’s holding his
left arm in his right, with what looks like a gunshot wound in the left arm.
PATRON #1:
SOME LOUDMOUTH GUY CAME IN. HE STARTED IT. HE WAS JUST LOOKING FOR TROUBLE.
Frame 6: Keys has stood up, and is standing in front of the man at the bar, the
second patron at the bar is also there, he also has a head wound, though not too
serious maybe a cut on the forehead.
KEYS: WHO
WAS HE? DID YOU KNOW HIM?
PATRON #1:
NAH. NEVER SEEN HIM BEFORE, JUDGE.
PATRON #2:
I KNOW HIM.
Frame 7: Close up on patron #2.
PATRON #2:
HE JUST RAN OUT THE BACK A MINUTE AGO. HE’S GOES BY THE NAME DICE.
Frame 8: Tight on Judge Keys.
KEYS: DROKK!
PAGE 4
Five frames. Would the fifth frame work as a banner frame, across the bottom third
of the page?
Frame 1: Exterior of the bar again. Dredd is parking beside Keys’ Lawmaster
Frame 2: Interior of the Monkey Bar. It’s the same as it was the last time
we where here, with a couple of slight changes. Keys is no longer there, and Dredd
is.
DREDD:
WHAT THE HELL’S GOING ON HERE?
Frame 3: Dredd is looking down at the man on the floor, as one of the men at the
bar fills him in on what’s going on.
PATRON #1:
THE OTHER JUDGE JUST WENT AFTER THE GUY WHO DID IT.
Frame 4: Dredd is crouched on the floor, examining the prone form in the woman’s
arms.
DREDD: DEAD.
DREDD CONT:
WENT AFTER WHO?
PATRON #1 FROM OFF FRAME:
GUY CALLED DICE.
Frame 5: Exterior. The alleyway behind the bar. It’s the same alley we’ve
seen in every episode of Starsky and Hutch. Keys has caught Dice. Dice has a tramp
around the neck, using him as cover, with a blaster at the tramps head. Keys has
his Lawgiver pointed at his brother.
Dredd is running
towards them in the background.
DICE: COME
ON TERRY...
KEYS: DROP
IN WEAPON CREEP!
DICE: TERRY...
KEYS: I
SWEAR TO GRUD, I WILL SHOOT!
PAGE 5
Frame 1: Dredd has his gun on Keys, Keys has his gun on Dice, Dice is still behind
the worried looking tramp. Think Reservoir Dogs.
DREDD: TAKE
HIM KEYS. OR I TAKE YOU.
KEYS: DREDD.
YOU DON’T UNDERSTAND...
DREDD: I
UNDERSTAND MORE THAN YOU THINK KEYS. HE MAY BE YOUR BROTHER, BUT YOU’RE
A JUDGE AND HE’S A PERP.
Frame 2: Mid length of Dice and the tramp.
DICE: TERRY,
DON’T LISTEN TO HIM. HE’LL KILL YOU IF HE GETS THE CHANCE. COME ON
BRO...
TRAMP: BROTHERS..?
MAYBE I SHOULD GO...
Frame 3: Just the heads of Keys in the foreground and Dredd behind are visible.
DREDD: YOU
KNOW ME KEYS. YOU KNOW THAT’S NOT TRUE. TAKE HIM AND GET ON WITH THE JOB.
YOU’RE ON THE LINE KEYS. DON’T CROSS IT.
Frame 4: Similar to frame 1, but tighter. We can see that Keys is gripping his
gun so tight his hand is trembling. A tear is rolling down his cheek from below
his helmet.
KEYS: DROP
THE GRUDDAM WEAPON DICE!
Frame 5: Dice and the tramp.
DICE: YOU
KNOW I CAN’T DO THAT TERRY. I’LL-
Frame 6: View from behind
Dice. Keys has fired his gun, and shot Dice in the face. His body is being thrown
backwards by the force of the shot; the back of his head is bursting with the
exit wound.
SFX: BLAMM!
Frame 7: Dredd, still in the background, is looking at Keys. Keys has his head
down, echoing his pose at the end of part one.
DREDD: GOOD
WORK KEYS.
Frame 8: Keys has not moved, but Dredd as turned his back on him and is walking
away.
DREDD: SEE
YOU ON THE STREETS.
END.
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